Every student concerns about campus safety, so do the parents. Many tragic had already happened before on the school campuses in different states, from the minor problems to the deadly cases: stealing; robbery; rapping and killing. There are some crimes going on in our living environments on campus, there are now just some minor problems, but if we don’t pay attention to them, the small problems will turn into the deadly viruses someday.
Last week in Centennial Halls, our dorm buildings, there were several cases of stolen properties. Students told us the suspects came into their rooms at night while they were asleep, took the electronics out of their rooms. Students went to the front desks and campus safety for helps, but unfortunately no one could help them. There weren’t any cameras on the floors besides the main lobby, the suspects could be outsiders, and they could be one of us who live in the dorm buildings. If that’s the case, we won’t have much chance to find out who actually did the stealing. There are cameras in the elevators, and we need to access the elevators with our student ID cards even though we are in the building, but the cameras aren’t recording all the time, they only record when someone in the elevator press the emergency button. Let’s say that the cameras are on and record all the time, it is hard to tell who the suspects are since almost everyone uses the elevators. There is another way to avoid the cameras. That is using the stairs, with the access from the student ID cards, after you getting into the stairs. There is no camera to record your moves.
The security system in our dorm buildings is kind of effective to the outsiders, but it’s useless to the insiders like us. With the student ID, we can do whatever we want, walk out to the lobby with stolen items in our backpacks, who can tell if they aren’t looks for your classes that you are going to? We should be grateful that they were only crimes of stealing not anything worse. But we sure need to fix the problems to prevent the worse cases from happening.
One good way to do it is to install more cameras in the buildings, on every floor and in the stairs cases as well. We need full time records on the paths where all of us use to go up and down stairs. There we can at least have something to work on when the troubles hit. I know many of us will complain of losing their private times of living on campus, but it is necessary if we want a safer campus.
Monday, February 25, 2008
Monday, February 18, 2008
Declaration of Independence
In the document Thomas Jefferson has made many ethos appeals. He gave his audience facts to prove that his points of views were right. “To prove this, let Facts be submitted to a candid world…” This sentence was from the transcript of the document. And because of all the ethos appeals, the document seemed more forceful, and easier to fall for, to believe in. At the same time there are a lot of appeals to logo as well. There were about twenty similar sentences followed up: started with the letter “he”; He talked about the England King and his ridiculous rules and laws to his people. But if you read the sentences, and if you have gone through those facts, then Thomas Jefferson would have used appeals of pathos as well.
He talked about the British King’s Laws to his people, and put himself into his people, here I mean there are many “we” and “our” used in this document. It is an appeal to pathos.
He talked about the British King’s Laws to his people, and put himself into his people, here I mean there are many “we” and “our” used in this document. It is an appeal to pathos.
Tuesday, February 12, 2008
Peer Review: letter to Sam
Sam:
In the writing you talked about yourself as a well experienced snow boarder and skier, and how you don’t agree with the author’s ideas. Even a well experienced snow boarder like you, don’t use the slang words “shredders” or anything else than that. You made a good point here, but not everyone know what you really mean here when you said “Teens all over the world know what I’m talking about.” Because of the culture differences and not everywhere have the environments for people to snow board or ski, I had some problem understanding what you were trying to say.
And the sentence “Terrain Park pass is not to instill good behavior in the ‘shredders’ and ‘free riders’, but to keep people who do not have the skills to negotiate the Terrain Park.” Second part of the sentence doesn’t really make sense, besides that you did a good job telling readers about your knowledge on mountain culture. That makes me believe what you say without a doubt.
Everything else seems very good.
Sean Hu
In the writing you talked about yourself as a well experienced snow boarder and skier, and how you don’t agree with the author’s ideas. Even a well experienced snow boarder like you, don’t use the slang words “shredders” or anything else than that. You made a good point here, but not everyone know what you really mean here when you said “Teens all over the world know what I’m talking about.” Because of the culture differences and not everywhere have the environments for people to snow board or ski, I had some problem understanding what you were trying to say.
And the sentence “Terrain Park pass is not to instill good behavior in the ‘shredders’ and ‘free riders’, but to keep people who do not have the skills to negotiate the Terrain Park.” Second part of the sentence doesn’t really make sense, besides that you did a good job telling readers about your knowledge on mountain culture. That makes me believe what you say without a doubt.
Everything else seems very good.
Sean Hu
Peer Review: letter to Hannah
Hannah:
Your letter to the editor talked about the “Clean Energy Progress Fund”, how this fund will affect the environment we are living right now, if the funds cannot be collected in time, we will lose a lot of the world’s great wonders.
According to your writing, the main claim is that we should have our “Colorado Clean Energy Progress Fund” collected in time before our living environment has more damages.
This piece of writing has used appeals of logo and pathos. The examples: warming temperatures, the contamination of water and so on support that if we don’t do what we can do, the world will lose its beauty. And talking about the fact that the pine forest will be dead in three to five years makes the appeals stronger.
It is only a three dollar fund, it makes me think of how much money we use every day for food or anything else, three dollar is nothing to most of the people, you made a very good connection here with the readers. It would be nice if you can put another environmental damage that has already happened, I think it is easier for some of us to remember what has already happened than imagine what will happen in the futures.
Sean Hu
Your letter to the editor talked about the “Clean Energy Progress Fund”, how this fund will affect the environment we are living right now, if the funds cannot be collected in time, we will lose a lot of the world’s great wonders.
According to your writing, the main claim is that we should have our “Colorado Clean Energy Progress Fund” collected in time before our living environment has more damages.
This piece of writing has used appeals of logo and pathos. The examples: warming temperatures, the contamination of water and so on support that if we don’t do what we can do, the world will lose its beauty. And talking about the fact that the pine forest will be dead in three to five years makes the appeals stronger.
It is only a three dollar fund, it makes me think of how much money we use every day for food or anything else, three dollar is nothing to most of the people, you made a very good connection here with the readers. It would be nice if you can put another environmental damage that has already happened, I think it is easier for some of us to remember what has already happened than imagine what will happen in the futures.
Sean Hu
Sunday, February 10, 2008
Letter to Dr. Schonberg
Dear Dr. Schonberg:
How are you?
Through out these first five weeks of the quarter, I have learned so much about writing. I didn’t even have the feelings that half of the quarter has already gone until I am doing this Mid-term Portfolio homework.
As a writer, my arguments in the writings are much more clear and powerful. Instead of writing about nothing and going nowhere, my goals are easy to be found. This half of the quarter, we mostly put our minds onto finding arguments from other writings; and make our own arguments with appealing to the audiences. And there are three branches of appeal to audiences: Emotional appeals; Ethical appeals; and Logical appeals. And I enjoyed learning all these appeals with the ways Dr. Schonberg you provided for us:
I had problems with writing my whole life, not because I can’t write, it’s just the horror feelings every time I started writing a paper. I don’t enjoy reading my essays in front of the class or doing anything close to it, because I know that my works are usually worse than any other classmates’.
But at the beginning of this course, our first project was a facebook chatting assignment! One of the BIG rules was not to tell others in the class who you really are as a facebook character. What a surprise to me, I could be able to practice my writing and reviewed by my classmates without knowing who I am. I loved it! I started to learn how to write in a better form. As a writer, I learned to find arguments. Everything is always started with an argument, there are logics behind it. Now I look at writing as doing some logical problems. Following the steps, find the arguments, then tell the audiences if you agree with it or not, and prove it. It is very straight forward if you know what you are going to say.
My first writing assignment was an in-class free writing; I talked about my first year seminar last quarter. I had a long first paragraph, writing about the seminar itself. Second paragraph I wrote about the writings I have done last quarter and then I talked about what I did for writing in high school. The writing ended after I finished talking about nothing, really. No arguments, no my own opinions. It was a lame article I will say. I couldn’t see how bad this piece of writing was when the course first started. I want to talk about the writings I did recently. Facebook project, I analyzed the comments my friends sent me, think about what appeals they have used while sending me the comments. During facebooking, we all learned the ways to chat with opposite sex. Logical appeals didn’t seem too helpful in this case. But emotional appeals were the main prescriptions. Unless you are very into figuring out the true meanings of arguments, emotional appeals would work very nicely. Ethos didn’t work as well as pathos.
Look back to the beginning of the class, I could tell that I am more of a writer now. Knowing how to argue makes me even more outstanding than the others when an argument comes up. I have improved a lot from reading the text book as well as the newspapers. The second project we are doing now is reading the newspapers, finding the arguments from articles. The writers from the newspapers are not as mystical as I thought they were, because I can make arguments to their writings now, so many little things I can break a hole through. I enjoyed making arguments to the writers. My improvements are also related to the reviews and evaluations from you and my classmates. I am very grateful for the comments. They helped me understand myself more, the audiences can easily tell what is going on wrong in this article, but it takes more time to figure it out ourselves because we wrote the articles. From the peer review I found many more of the arguments I could write about as well.
Writing takes skills and practices. With the helps from Dr. Schonberg, and my classmates, I can see myself improve rapidly. The goals for the second half of the quarter are going to be: open my mind wider to accept more ideas of arguments; to be more active to the in-class studies; and write more for the class as the quarter goes by… There are many good writers in my class right now, I can learn a lot reading their pieces, I wish we will have more chances to read others’ writing, but keep the group size as small as possible. I found that the smaller size of the group the easier to understand the purpose of what their writings are about for me. It is not hard to write, if you can catch the right ideas of what you want to write and what you are arguing about.
I am getting even more excited going to my writing classes than the beginning of this quarter. Thank you for your helps in writing Dr. Schonberg. And I am looking forward to actually send an effective essay to the Denver Post editors.
Sincerely,
Sean Hu
How are you?
Through out these first five weeks of the quarter, I have learned so much about writing. I didn’t even have the feelings that half of the quarter has already gone until I am doing this Mid-term Portfolio homework.
As a writer, my arguments in the writings are much more clear and powerful. Instead of writing about nothing and going nowhere, my goals are easy to be found. This half of the quarter, we mostly put our minds onto finding arguments from other writings; and make our own arguments with appealing to the audiences. And there are three branches of appeal to audiences: Emotional appeals; Ethical appeals; and Logical appeals. And I enjoyed learning all these appeals with the ways Dr. Schonberg you provided for us:
I had problems with writing my whole life, not because I can’t write, it’s just the horror feelings every time I started writing a paper. I don’t enjoy reading my essays in front of the class or doing anything close to it, because I know that my works are usually worse than any other classmates’.
But at the beginning of this course, our first project was a facebook chatting assignment! One of the BIG rules was not to tell others in the class who you really are as a facebook character. What a surprise to me, I could be able to practice my writing and reviewed by my classmates without knowing who I am. I loved it! I started to learn how to write in a better form. As a writer, I learned to find arguments. Everything is always started with an argument, there are logics behind it. Now I look at writing as doing some logical problems. Following the steps, find the arguments, then tell the audiences if you agree with it or not, and prove it. It is very straight forward if you know what you are going to say.
My first writing assignment was an in-class free writing; I talked about my first year seminar last quarter. I had a long first paragraph, writing about the seminar itself. Second paragraph I wrote about the writings I have done last quarter and then I talked about what I did for writing in high school. The writing ended after I finished talking about nothing, really. No arguments, no my own opinions. It was a lame article I will say. I couldn’t see how bad this piece of writing was when the course first started. I want to talk about the writings I did recently. Facebook project, I analyzed the comments my friends sent me, think about what appeals they have used while sending me the comments. During facebooking, we all learned the ways to chat with opposite sex. Logical appeals didn’t seem too helpful in this case. But emotional appeals were the main prescriptions. Unless you are very into figuring out the true meanings of arguments, emotional appeals would work very nicely. Ethos didn’t work as well as pathos.
Look back to the beginning of the class, I could tell that I am more of a writer now. Knowing how to argue makes me even more outstanding than the others when an argument comes up. I have improved a lot from reading the text book as well as the newspapers. The second project we are doing now is reading the newspapers, finding the arguments from articles. The writers from the newspapers are not as mystical as I thought they were, because I can make arguments to their writings now, so many little things I can break a hole through. I enjoyed making arguments to the writers. My improvements are also related to the reviews and evaluations from you and my classmates. I am very grateful for the comments. They helped me understand myself more, the audiences can easily tell what is going on wrong in this article, but it takes more time to figure it out ourselves because we wrote the articles. From the peer review I found many more of the arguments I could write about as well.
Writing takes skills and practices. With the helps from Dr. Schonberg, and my classmates, I can see myself improve rapidly. The goals for the second half of the quarter are going to be: open my mind wider to accept more ideas of arguments; to be more active to the in-class studies; and write more for the class as the quarter goes by… There are many good writers in my class right now, I can learn a lot reading their pieces, I wish we will have more chances to read others’ writing, but keep the group size as small as possible. I found that the smaller size of the group the easier to understand the purpose of what their writings are about for me. It is not hard to write, if you can catch the right ideas of what you want to write and what you are arguing about.
I am getting even more excited going to my writing classes than the beginning of this quarter. Thank you for your helps in writing Dr. Schonberg. And I am looking forward to actually send an effective essay to the Denver Post editors.
Sincerely,
Sean Hu
Wednesday, February 6, 2008
forth letter to denver post
To Denver Post:
The article “Caucus system excludes many who want to vote” makes me concern how close are the votes for presidency to who the people really want. Think about the situation more thoroughly, there are so many voters left out because of the bad weather. And I am sure that no employers want to give their employees a day off just so they can go to vote. In their (employers) minds, whoever is going to be the president does not bother them. And as a college student, there are many of us who are old enough to vote but there is no time to do so. Two nights ago I could hear many of us asking others if they want to go vote. Most of the answers were either “I have a group meeting to go to” or “so tired I want to stay in bed…” and etc. Maybe because it is the first time for most of us to vote, we still don’t have the idea of how important each vote of ours means.
But there are many elderly people who are not able to drive in the snow to vote, there are so many things limited the elderly from voting. And I think there should be at least two to three dates for us to vote, different time frames as well. So that the ones couldn’t make it to the first voting date may have the chance to come to the next one. Dates are not what matters, the votes of the people are. More flexibility and more advertisements for the young voters may help us picking the next right president.
Sincerely
Sean
The article “Caucus system excludes many who want to vote” makes me concern how close are the votes for presidency to who the people really want. Think about the situation more thoroughly, there are so many voters left out because of the bad weather. And I am sure that no employers want to give their employees a day off just so they can go to vote. In their (employers) minds, whoever is going to be the president does not bother them. And as a college student, there are many of us who are old enough to vote but there is no time to do so. Two nights ago I could hear many of us asking others if they want to go vote. Most of the answers were either “I have a group meeting to go to” or “so tired I want to stay in bed…” and etc. Maybe because it is the first time for most of us to vote, we still don’t have the idea of how important each vote of ours means.
But there are many elderly people who are not able to drive in the snow to vote, there are so many things limited the elderly from voting. And I think there should be at least two to three dates for us to vote, different time frames as well. So that the ones couldn’t make it to the first voting date may have the chance to come to the next one. Dates are not what matters, the votes of the people are. More flexibility and more advertisements for the young voters may help us picking the next right president.
Sincerely
Sean
third letter to denver post
To Denver Post:
I have read the article about children cares: “What about mothers who choose drugs over kids”. And I want to talk about it.
First of all the claim in this piece of writing is very straight forward, that there are the mothers to blame before blaming the government when there is child dies. The government is trying to give unqualified mothers helps so that their children can have better environments to live. Because every child should be treated the same or at least be treated fair when they are not old enough to live on by themselves. I have seen it happened in my life, my uncle’s daughter has two children, and they are adopted, two kids’ original parents had problems with drugs, the court gave them chance to keep the kids if they could stop using drugs for three months. But I guess it was not as easy as it sounds, the parents started doing drugs again. The kids are having the most wonderful life here with my uncle’s family. No one is perfect, and it is not necessary for everyone to have the same goal. In this case I’m talking about the children. You can have a lot of money, get a exotic car and wreck it, I’m sure that many car lovers will be heartbreaking. But kids are different. They are not just some decorations at your house, or cars. They are parts of the mothers. We gave them lives, it is reasonable to give them a fair living environment to stay in as well. It is ridiculous blaming the governments not taking good enough care of the babies. It should be the mothers’ failures not doing their jobs.
With a true story happened in my family, I am touched when I first read the article. We should be appreciated for what the society is doing for the children safe program. And put more focuses onto the mothers who originally caused the troubles. We all need to stand on the same side to against the problems.
Sincerely
Sean
I have read the article about children cares: “What about mothers who choose drugs over kids”. And I want to talk about it.
First of all the claim in this piece of writing is very straight forward, that there are the mothers to blame before blaming the government when there is child dies. The government is trying to give unqualified mothers helps so that their children can have better environments to live. Because every child should be treated the same or at least be treated fair when they are not old enough to live on by themselves. I have seen it happened in my life, my uncle’s daughter has two children, and they are adopted, two kids’ original parents had problems with drugs, the court gave them chance to keep the kids if they could stop using drugs for three months. But I guess it was not as easy as it sounds, the parents started doing drugs again. The kids are having the most wonderful life here with my uncle’s family. No one is perfect, and it is not necessary for everyone to have the same goal. In this case I’m talking about the children. You can have a lot of money, get a exotic car and wreck it, I’m sure that many car lovers will be heartbreaking. But kids are different. They are not just some decorations at your house, or cars. They are parts of the mothers. We gave them lives, it is reasonable to give them a fair living environment to stay in as well. It is ridiculous blaming the governments not taking good enough care of the babies. It should be the mothers’ failures not doing their jobs.
With a true story happened in my family, I am touched when I first read the article. We should be appreciated for what the society is doing for the children safe program. And put more focuses onto the mothers who originally caused the troubles. We all need to stand on the same side to against the problems.
Sincerely
Sean
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